20.12.2011, 19:50
palblog :: Blast from the Past #343: November 2, 2004: notes on Ep. 98 second draft, notes on Ep. 100 first draft, and comments on premises for Eps. 102 and 103 :: 20.12.2011 19:42
Subj: notes on Ep. 98 second draft
Date: Tuesday, November 2, 2004 4:47:10 PM
From: Peter Laird
To: Lloyd Goldfine
Lloyd,
Here are my notes on the Ep. 98 second draft.
1.) Re: the following:
"
ON THE TURTLES, looking up at the display. There’s another display behind them, mostly vegetation and prehistoric bushes.
LEONARDO
Eeesh. And I thought Raph was the ugliest relative we had.
RAPHAEL
Har-dee-har, Leo."
Leo's line here seems so not-Leo-like. Is he trying to be Mikey?
2.) Re: the following:
"
*DONATELLO (CONT’D)
Anything we do could alter the future… we could unintentionally change our entire timeline! We can’t leave anything behind, and we have to… ah… ah… AH-CHOOOO!
Don lets loose with another explosive ."
I don't know if anyone else has already thought of this, but as I was reading this I thought it might be a cool nugget of an idea if the microorganisms in Don's sneeze (a byproduct of his "alien" ooze infection) have some repercussions, i.e. starting some kind of chain of events which lead to mutations of some sort -- maybe a hidden species of weird Cthulian-type creatures, or maybe mutated dinosaurs or something. Might be worth talking about.
3.) Re: the following:
"
OTS TURTLES – as they watch the stampede fade away in the distance. Leo turns to Don.
*LEONARDO
Stuffy nose, huh?"
Leo's line here had me scratching my head, trying to figure out what he was referring to. Then I looked back about FIVE PAGES to see that he was referring to Don's sneeze in the previous act. It's not a big deal, but it does seem kind of disconnected. As it is not a line which is necessary, maybe we should lose it.
4.) At least now I get how Mike has potato chips in the next espisode -- the Turtles are apparently still wearing their "human" disguises from their museum visit. I wonder how this is going to work, visually -- will they look dopey fighting dinos in these "street clothes"? And when are they going to get rid of the clothes?
-- Pete
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